On the fringe of a broken and desolate ravine two figures appeared, both bulky and cumbersome, weighed by something strapped to their backs. One was smaller than the other and also more careless, it moved faster and rushed to the rocky edge. Grey pebble crumbled beneath its feet and in a cloud of dust fell down the slope. Bigger figure came closer and held the smaller ones hand firmly, preventing the fall.
They stood there listening to the angry howling winds, gazed far into wounded, arid and lifeless land, strewn with large rock formations and rifts. In the middle of the dead landscape small metallic dome sprouted from the cooked clay. The earth around it looked dark and there were fewer fissures, but it was still rough and lifeless.
Dense clouds sped up at low altitude as if in the futile attempt to leave this unwelcome place. But there werent any hospitable places left on this ravaged planet anymore. Dust storm was quickly forming in the distance, deceptively far. The lightning bolts at storms edge could be seen already, like a bizarre white forest, coming closer every minute, threatening. It felt like the land itself desperately wanted to drive the two visitors out.
And theyve turned back and walked cautiously to their flyboat, shrouded in darkness and thick obscuring dust. Once inside, they removed their protective suits and mirrored helmets and strapped themselves to the seats. The big man smiled to his daughter and the boat darted up and forward, almost vertically, through the cloud wall.
- Daddy, when the flowers will start to grow? asked the girl.
- Not today, dear. answered her father somewhat wearily.
- Youre saying that every day, dad. Youve promised me, remember?
- I know, princess. Youve seen the plant, right? Its working now and soon there will be a garden around it, you just wait.
- I hope so, sighed the girl. I really-really want to see the garden!
Man beckoned and pulled the controls.
- Lets get back to our castle, princess. Or well miss our meals; you know how strict she can be at times! He said with a comically serious look much to the delight of his laughing daughter.
They finally breached through the darkness, rising above the boiling field of clouds to the bright sun, unseen from the surface. They were close to their home now.
Soon the boat was docked in the belly of a massive skyplatform, floating high in the stratosphere above the Earth. The two disembarked and the girl ran down the corridor to hug her mother.
- Dad said that the plants are working! She exclaimed happily, - The flowers will grow soon! And the trees!
- Of course, dear, Smiled the women, gently tousling her daughters short hair, - Come on, the dinners ready. And remember to go into deactivation chamber first, you hear me?
- Sure, mom! - giggled the girl, running away.
The man came close to his wife and embraced her, breathing sweet scent of her hair and skin. They stood like that for a minute and she gently kissed him but when he opened his eyes she looked worried.
- Youre telling her stories again? How soon?
- I dont know. The readings were positive, but
Maybe several years. Or more. Its worse than we thought. We can condense enough water but the atmosphere wont recover that fast.
- Almost everybody left already. There are some places still left on the escape ships...
- No.
- Even for our daughter?
- She will be fine here with us. Besides, there are other platforms. Not everybody are cowards, I just cant believe that. Its our legacy! We can revive our world; its just not as fast as we hoped. But we cannot simply leave it like that after what weve done to it. Do you remember my promise? Someday Ill bring you flowers from the surface
She looked seriously in his eyes for a long time and sighed very quietly. Then a calm smile came across her lips and she held her husbands hand firmly in hers, pulling him forward. He stopped, brought her close and hugged her again before rushing playfully to the dining room. Theyve had a lot of work tomorrow.















Comments
If I were to pick out one thing that I liked about the story above anything else it would be the concept of floating platforms and barren earth. I've seen it once or twice in other mediums, but it never gets old and everyone seems to find a different reason and interpretation for what went wrong. The fact that you left it a bit of a mystery is a good thing I think. Good job
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From what it looks like, you have a creative penchant for the sci-fi futuristic genre. Personally I love the stuff, so I'm planning on reading more.
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And welcome to PAD - I look forward to seeing more of you and your work!
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Be mad. It helps.
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Love??? Ano yun??? Nakakain ba 'yun???
(Love??? What's that??? Is it edible???)
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