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Of light and darkness by *iromanovsky:iconiromanovsky:



The Prince of Silence walked behind me. He was my cohort, my eternal speechless friend and follower and accomplice of my crime. Today I brought some flowers, beautiful orchids, darker than the deepest night, which bloom once in eternity with petals so delicate that a mere breathe could shatter their otherworldly beauty. I wanted to give them to her even though I knew there was no hope for me. She was the heir of light and I… Well, I was a thing of darkness.

From the basement of the castle I came forth to the sacred window. Its dark stained glass used to tell me stories when I still was a kid. I felt myself guilty for making a hole, but this was the only way to see.

She was outside. Night by night she sat there on the black grass, weaving something from the threads of moonlight, singing a song and waiting for the sun to shed its bright and deadly light on the land before her. It was painful to look at her radiance but I endured the pain. There wasn’t a thing I wanted more than to run to her, to give her my flowers and to sing her my own song but each time I was just about to leave the castle - fear had its firm grip on me, chaining me to the stone floor like heaviest shackles. The bright light of the sun would mean an end for me. It was inevitable.

I couldn’t hear what she was singing. I only felt the gentle breeze of her unheard words before the Prince ate them and spat out empty husks made of lead letters. Somehow they jingled quietly while falling on the floor... But still I felt mesmerizing vibration inside when her song intertwined with mine and I knew that my fate was sealed.

I turned the handle and pulled the knob with force. The dust fell down like a curtain and a path opened before me yet again. I hesitated for a moment and then I ran, leaving the Prince of Silence, my dear friend, behind the window in astonishment of my heinous act.

Bright starlight burned holes in my cape but I was fast and reckless like a storm. Only that wasn’t enough. The dawn was already claiming its rights and it was too late. Before my hand grasping the orchids could reach her, bright light turned my body to ashes and a gentle breeze scattered them across the land.

Next thing I knew I was walking down the stairs back to the basement with the Prince behind me. I felt that I’ve remembered something, some very important things but I wasn’t sure what they were. It was another night and I was so tired, I only wanted to rest for a while and the Prince behind started to hum his favorite song. It was the song of silence.
©2009 *iromanovsky
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Author's Comments

This is a short sketch of a story i wrote for a Prompt-a-day club. It's the fastest story i did and in a drunken haze too, so please do not judge it too hard. Or rather do as you like, who i am to tell you what to do anyway.

Errm, ok. Not the most thoroughly-edited piece for critique but it might be even better this way. So, if anybody's willing to throw in some tomatoes - they're welcome.

Here's the link to the couple of tracks i've listened to get the mood for this prompt [link]

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:iconnexusyuber:
If there's one thing I like about what you've done with this prompt, it's the image and otherworldly feeling it gives off. The flowers, the song and the different realities of darkness and light work really well in my mind, especially coupled with how it stymied the main character from reaching the 'heir of light'. The bit where he turned to ashes and merely reappeared, unsuccessful in his own reality just reinforced the magical nature of the world you created.

All in all I thought this was really good, especially when you consider that it was a prompt and that you considered yourself impaired. I would call this a complete success.
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:iconlatenightlady:
wow - this is so poetic - very beautiful :) You should make something out of this

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:iconlatenightlady:
you should write with a bottle beside you more often, my friend :)

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:iconiromanovsky:
You think so? :) I ususally try to avoid that so that it won't turn into one not-really-healthy habit. But i have to admit that the, let's call it altered state, has some advantages arright.

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:iconlatenightlady:
:)

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:icondunne:
I can almost imagine that the prince of silence would be metaphorical to a printing press turning spoken word to little metal letters of stamped metal for a type print.

I can also imagine that the light would be a television in which one would watch the light coming from the screen, while the darkness would be a movie screen that always plays its own work in darkness, like the delicate-to-the-breath flowers of screen to television that movies always are separated by.

Of course, I'm just seeing this as a very unique view of the contrast of films on a screen and programs on a television.

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